Feedback and scipt changes

So today we had another showing of work in progress in class. The feedback we got on the concepts & designs was quite positive and the tutors seemed to like the idea of stylizing the film with painted textures. Em did some concepts showing these textures and it seemed like we "got the okay" on that. The character concepts I posted yesterday for the kid seemed to work too, and the look seemed to suit the age of the boy-character. We told them that we would spend the day rewriting and "trimming the fat" of the script to make it tighter and funnier - so after lunch we went over to the Phoenix-labs to work on it. To make a long story short; We did a LOT of trimming! Came to the conclusion that the date could just as well start with them meeting in the park and then we figured the start/ending in the bar was unnecessary too. So the new script we came up with is this: